Narrative paragraph

Author: Ahmad Faiz (12320024)
Email: faizelf13@gmail.com
Type: Narrative Paragraph

My Story at Islamic University of Malang

State Islamic University of Malang was not my first choice. I chose State University of Malang as my choice. However, State University of Malang doesn't have English language and literature major. It made me really confuse. I asked some suggestion from my parents and my seniors/highers. Finally, i chose State Islamic University of Malang due to the major what i wanted there. I never imagined it before. State islamic university of Mlang gave me many experiences such as staying in Ma'had and learning Arabic language. State Islamic University of Malang is my rightest choice.

Reviewer:

Review I by Rima Ayu

• Your writing is good when you decided to choose the vocabulary, your tenses is also good. you use "due to" can make your writing as like as academic writing.

Review II by Ghulam

• There are some wrong tenses. in the last line you wrote state islamic univerity was my right choice (changed). it should be state islamic is my right choice  because you study in that university until now. 

Review III by Samsul

• I disagree with Rima because she said the grammatical is good it's very wrong i think. because in this paragraph the grammatical is not good.

Review IV by Anan

• I compare my story and yours. then i realize you have good style to sequence your story rather than what i write.

Narrative Paragraph

Author: Istiqomah Khairunnisah
Type: Narrative Paragraph

My name is Istiqomah Khairunnisah and i come from beautiful island, Lombok. Actually, there is  a good university and it offers good job for our future at my hometown, but my grandfather ordered me to go far away and choose my own way, it does not mean that my family hate me, they want me to be an independent person. My mother gave me a newspaper about UIN Malang and she said that i have to choose this university because in UIN we learn not only social subject but also religion subject. Actually, i really like the things about humanity and i want to learn more by choosing psychology, but my mother forbid me to choose it because she thought that being a teacher is good for the bright future. i was angry at that time, i was full of emotion and i said that i did not want to continue my study. my mom was crying and i knew that i hurt her heart and with no intention i choose English department in order to make my mother happy.

Reviewer:

Review I by Mahda Rizka Candra Kirana

• Your writing was good and easy to understand. i like your effort to make your mother happy.

Review II by Khoridatul I

• I find one mistake and i have underlined it.

Review III by N.F Rifana

• reviewer II said that "my mother was crying". in my opinion, it is not a mistake. i think she wants to write a past progressive tense. by looking at the previous sentence i think it is not a mistake

Review IV by Khoridatul I

• In my opinion, this writing is more grammatically than mine, and she (the writer) can write the story longer than mine.