Type: Narrative Paragraph
My name is Istiqomah Khairunnisah and i come from beautiful island, Lombok. Actually, there is a good university and it offers good job for our future at my hometown, but my grandfather ordered me to go far away and choose my own way, it does not mean that my family hate me, they want me to be an independent person. My mother gave me a newspaper about UIN Malang and she said that i have to choose this university because in UIN we learn not only social subject but also religion subject. Actually, i really like the things about humanity and i want to learn more by choosing psychology, but my mother forbid me to choose it because she thought that being a teacher is good for the bright future. i was angry at that time, i was full of emotion and i said that i did not want to continue my study. my mom was crying and i knew that i hurt her heart and with no intention i choose English department in order to make my mother happy.
Reviewer:
Review I by Mahda Rizka Candra Kirana
- Your writing was good and easy to understand. i like your effort to make your mother happy.
- I find one mistake and i have underlined it.
- reviewer II said that "my mother was crying". in my opinion, it is not a mistake. i think she wants to write a past progressive tense. by looking at the previous sentence i think it is not a mistake
- In my opinion, this writing is more grammatically than mine, and she (the writer) can write the story longer than mine.
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